What do you think of my 2 poems? Comments and how I can improve?

POEM 1

Flowers open one by one each bringing you a cupful of spring

The flowers bloom to the blue sky

The delicate beautiful flowers lived to blossom

When songs of birds are in the air

when the buds are blossoming

smiling welcome to the spring

Soft lovely petals floating in the breeze

Light pink cherry blossoms carefree as a cloud

The sunshine gleams so bright and warm

Darting birds in the sky clear and blue

Beautiful orchard shine through

Eye catching colors in a field full of flowers

And reaching all over the meadows

Growths of colors are everywhere

With variant shades in a row

The sun smiles with a final glimmer

Spring is in the air

And you can smell it in the breeze

This is the sweet smell of spring



POEM 2

Once upon a Summer day

Birds chirped in a musical way

Grass with drops of morning dew

The sky covered in a vast color of blue

Here comes the warm summer breeze

Cotton clouds floating by

Baby blue paints the sky

Summer smells fill the air

As we play with out a care

Summer brings us nice warm sun

freedom

laughter

joy

fun

Dreaming long lazy summer days

Far of horizons

Flower fields amaze

Finding sea shells in the sand

To do all these things and more

At the beach and seashore

What a

peaceful

pleasant

way to spend a quiet summer day

What do you think of my 2 poems? Comments and how I can improve?
no offense but they aren't that great
Reply:I very much like the second one

i read it and it reminds me of a simpler time when i was young and used to play in my grandmothers backyard.

truly, i think the way you wove your words together is what brought me into your poem. it is something i can reach out and touch; very close to some memories of summer I have.

wonderful
Reply:"The sky covered in a vast color of blue"

just put "vast blue"
Reply:I like the second one. How the words rhyme and the rythm, great job.

I think the second one is great the way it is

the first one I would reccomend more of a beat to it.